Thesis statement

https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/588/01/

Thursday 31st July 2014

A.  Peer review essay 2

1 find a partner
2  read thier 1st draft and complete page 87 of writing book...use your partners book so they can read it later



B.  Review homework

1.  Check with your partner Grammar for writing answers Unit 3 Stage A task 1 (p59-62)

2.  Check your examples of present perfect, passive voice and modal verbs in Texts 3a and 3b in Reading source book

C.  useful phrases and summary

1.  Check useful phrases from text 3b and see which ones you could use in your essay

2.  Check summary and see how you could use this in your essay



D.  Use the peer review and other tasks to work on your essay 3

useful essay/project phrases

use these phrases in your writing for better marks/results

The benefits have already been significant

The costs have been considerable

Such problems are a major concern

Another well documented problem is the

the problem has long been recognised

despite this

another cornerstone of...

to this end

...coexist alongside....

having dispensed with sth...for sth...

in contrast

It is far more efficient to...

as a result...

this debate has been raging for so long that....

less attention has been given to...

this is perhaps best illustrated by

this not only....but also.....

the damaging influence of....has been noted before

....accounts for ....percent of......

there is a strong incentive for......

Essay 2 discussion questions

How much commercial influences on SR has become harmful?

How could the problem be solved?

How much money does commerce invest in SR?

Who does the commercial influence impact?

Who should be responsible for the increasing harm to SR?

Where does commercial influence on SR happen?

Which type of industry has the most impact on SR?

Why has business become more influential factor on SR?

Why has commerce produced detrimental influences?

What are the commercial influences both negative and positive on SR?

What is the result?  What are the effects of these influences?

Error corrections (sources)

1.Since 1950s, fossil fuels supplied most of the world’ s energy needs,meanwhile,a series consequences were caused by using fossil fules and the exhaustion of it was predicted.The energy strategy is to replace fossil fuels by a new source.

2.Under the government control, Sweden follows sustainable development as a key to ensure a sound environment for current and future generations. Besides, Sweden became the first nation that has to pay tax from emitting carbon dioxide emissions from fossil fuels (Rosenthal, 2010). To illustrate, Stockholm, capital of Sweden, has decreased carbon dioxide emissions by one-fourth since 1990 and aims to be completely no fossil fuel use by 2050.

3.Over the last century, the shortage of the energy and the destruction of the environment have been a severe problem for many countries. Therefore, the sustainable development has been paid much attention since the 1980s. The sustainable development means that the people can meet their  needs at present without  influencing the future generations to meet their own needs.(source) This essay will discuss two aspects sustainable strategies, finding out how they can effect the sustainable development. It will focus on the energy strategy such as solar and wind and the environmental strategy such as green economy and green deal.

4.The essence of sustainable development is simply this: to provide for the fundamental needs to humankind without doing violence to the natural system of life on earth.(SOURCE)

5.As for the energy on the earth is increasingly scare, the government of China has taken a series of action to address this issue. One of the policies they promote is that China offer tax rebates on solar power.(SOURCE: http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/business-24327405)

6.However, biogas energy can be uneffective as governments need to establish a well-rounded pipe network to ensure sufficiently transport biogas. For instance, even though biogas fuels is about 20 percent cheaper than gasoline, residents in Kristianstad were reluctant to spend extra $4000 on a biogas or dual-fuel car unless the supply of biogas would keep sufficient and the construction of net work will keeping growing, to the extent that citizens in suburb area would be capable for this energy(source).

7.With the rapid development on economy in China from 1970s, many problems have gradually appeared. In the big cities, such as Beijing, Shanghai and Guangzhou, some similar urban troubles exist. For example, overloaded population (12.7 million in Guangzhou, 2011, from NBS), traffic congestion, water shortage.

8.When asked about the biggest problem today, many people say that it is the serious energy crisis and pollution .Over the last century, the non-renewable resources, such as coal, oil and natural gas were consumed constantly and lead to pollution. It is important to set effective strategy for sustainable development and need population to follow the ideas. This essay will discuss two sustainable strategies, wind power and green vehicle, whether they worked well and how to support the continued development.

9.Over the past three decade the world faced problems in the lifestyle consumer such as,  scarcity of natural resources, pollution, global warming and depletion of non-renewable resources. Consequently, search for alternatives sustained working on the balance between the objectives and environmental protection  which called sustainable development . "The word 'sustainable' means maintainable or bearable. Hence sustainable development refers to that development which may be prolonged for a considerable period of time or which may be bear¬able by the system and the society"( www.preservearticles.com).

10.Introduction

            Over two century, the intelligent of human invent much more technologies and create an innovative machine to make their life become more comfortable such as electronic machine. People feel they can live with facilities until the end of lifetime with no care about what is going to be happen to the next generation. If people can image background of things or what their have to exchange for them they might know the cost of resources that they lost for everyday of life. For example, in this period, people have seen the news about the deterioration of the environment, depletion of natural resources and over energy consumption are increasing each day. The followed effect is the greatest problems that have never appeared before in human history global warming. With the increasing concern of over the dangerous phenomenon people have invented the concept of using a new form of human life that suit with current situation which is called sustainable development. It is clear that nowadays some governments in developed countries turn to think about the solution that can save the world by send out the specific policy which match with their own economy. This essay will first describe how to use sustainable development in transportation, followed by new efficient strategy of agriculture and then focus on evaluate of both solution.

11.People have used non-renewable resources without taking into account about environmental issue. Then, consuming huge amount of resources leads it to a scarcity problem, which cause the increasing in price.  Using fossil fuels causes environment problems, such as carbon dioxide emission, global warming and climate change.

12.Biogas, one of the alternative resources, produces from waste such as detritus, old landfill, sewage pond, wood waste from flooring factories and tree pruning. To create energy from biogas, it has to transfer the waste of food in the biological process. The system will burn a gas to create heat and electricity or refine gas for transportation, so this can reduce the consumption of fossil fuels in the great amount. For example, Kristianstad has changed itself from using fossil fuel into biogas for a decade ago which saved $3.8 million on the cost of fossil fuels in production of heat and electricity and reduces half a million gallons of diesel each year. Biogas produces less carbon dioxide emission than fossil fuel because it is a renewable energy made from biological waste, a clean energy. Moreover, government also supports and encourages businesses and citizen by subsidies. For instance, a tiny pellet, one form of wood waste, produces less carbon dioxide when burning them in this form. Therefore, the government encourages people for using pellet furnaces with the guarantee purchases by government. This can eliminate 64 tons of carbon dioxide emissions and costs only half of the oil used.

science and commerce

Class Friday 18th July

We will do 2 things in todays class:

Please follow the instrcutions:

A.  How to include sources

1. Read page 21 of the Writing book.  IT IS VERY IMPORTANT THAT YOU DO THIS

IF YOU COPY WORK IT IS ILLEGAL IN UK UNIVERSITIES

IF YOU USE IDEAS FROM A BOOK AND DO NOT SAY WHERE YOU FOUND THAT INFORMATION IT IS ILLEGAL IN UK  UNIVERSITIES

2. Look at our paragraph on this website The Effectivenessof Biogas

look at the text and find the name and date of the author/writer/person/organisation who said this information

you may have to do this by searching the internet or by looking in your books (green book or reading source book).  Copy and paste the paragraphs into a word document

3.  Add the name and year of the author in brackets after the information, like this (Searing, 2014)

4. Make a list of all of the sources you have used following the APA6 style.  SHow me when you have finished

5.  When you have done this, do the same for your introduction from yesterday, then show me




B.  Peer evaluate a classmate's draft 1 of essay 1

Choose a partner who does not speak your first language.

Read thier 1st draft of essay 1

Use page 84 of the writing book and give the information to your partner
(REMEMBER TO ADVISE THEM ON SOURCES)


C.  When you finish do any writing you want to (essay 1 or project).  Use the ideas from teh feedback to help you.

Introductions

Over the last two decades, different ways of refining the education have been adopted in developed countries.  These newer education systems have created many successful people, such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs.  Therefore, the developing countries should use the existing model of education from developed countries (UK). This essay will discuss the education system in developed countries as well as the methods of enhancing the system in developing countries(Iraq).

Over the last ten years electronic communication has become popular worldwide.  Some people think it is convenient for people’s lives, such as mobile phones, however others find facebook or twitter unnecessary.  This essay will discuss the effect on social skills caused by social networks.  It could be argued that people will become more dependent on social media, which means face to face communication, written language and connection with family will decrease.

Over the last decade social media has become a form of popular global communication technology.  Sites such as facebook are used widely among young people.  This essay will describe several impacts brought by different means of social media and evaluate the effects they have on peoples daily life.  It will focus on the fact that the younger generation will benefit from these communication forms in terms of organising their lives.

The causes of war are complex and have been considered as the nightmare for humans.  WWII and Gulf War brought destruction and misery to millions.  This essay will point out the main cause of war and what should do to avoid war.  The key factor might be the difference of religions in different countries.

Technology has become the most important catalyst of global human communication since the 1980s.  There are many digital devices that people use to interact with others, such as mobile phones and computers.  This essay will describe some of the most successful ways to use electronic equipment for communication purposes.  It will show that while technology provides and opportunity to people to communicate long distances, rural inhabitants still feel isolated.

video links for alternative energy souces

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MXYJYNZpPmo

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ase7-ws6VH4

http://www.dailymail.co.uk/travel/article-2651417/People-power-Futuristic-solar-highways-one-step-closer-reality-crowdfunding-raises-1-2m-build-car-park-prototype.html

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I1_ut9GIr-U

Effectiveness of biogas

effective  successful efficient useful helpful valuable

Biogas can be a useful aternative energy source, it can solve the household waste problem.  For example potato peels, cooking oil and other food garbage can be used to produce this energy (SOURCE).

Also biogas can be effective due to it being a sustainable form of energy, which is processed to create heat, electricity for houses and fuel for vehicles.  Kristianstad has reduced half of fossil fuels by using biogas for the whole city (SOURCE).

However biogas might be ineffective as it costs much more money compared to geothermal power.  For instance the price of constructing a geothermal plant is around $10 million (SOURCE) in contrast to the expense of biogas which is about ten times the price, $144 million in Kristianstad (SOURCE)

The initial cost of making biogas is too high, so it may only be an option for richer countries.

In addition it is necessary to build a lot of pipes to sufficiently transport biogas (SOURCE).  This means that is may not be suitable for rural areas.

Video link fossil fuels

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FqmtLmmuQhw

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cJ-J91SwP8w

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q4DtOhe2LfQ

There are many problems created by the use of fossil fuels. (paragraph)

There are many problems created by the use of fossil fuels.  The first problem is pollution.  For example some factories cause air and water pollution when they use coal and oil to produce their products.  Another problem is greenhouse gas.  For instance the increasing amount of transport produces more emissions and harmful gases.  This leads to global warming.  So it seems clear that some solutions must be applied to reduce the stress on our environment


There are many problems created by the use of fossil fuels.  The initial problem is air pollution.  The use of transportation can lead to exhaust emissions, which cause a high level of carbon dioxide.  Another problem is water pollution.  For example manufacturing may release contaminated water into the sea, which has a harmful effects on animals.  In addition increasing populations create never ending needs of people.  This means manufacturing companies are using up the limited oil resources which are non recoverable/renewable.

There are many problems created by the use of fossil fuels. First of all oil and coal can cause air pollution.  Take Linfen for example, which is and engineering manufacturing city, which has high air contamination and people who live there can experience limited vision and wear face masks.  Another problem is water pollution and over consumption.  Factories sometimes use alot of water in their production processes, such as oil production which uses 4 litres of water to prodcue 1 litre of oil. The waste water will be released directly into the sea.  Finally the use of coal and oil can destroy animal species.  The emissions when they are burnt will raise the temperature of the earth to and extent that habitats are lost.

There are many problems created by the use of fossil fuels.  The first problem is burning fossil fuels by cars and factories.  This will cause toxic gas emissions, which can lead to air pollution.  It seems obvious that such events could lead to human diseases, such as lung cancer.  Another issue is water pollution.  This is because waste water from the extraction of coal or oil from the earth is poured into rivers or oceans.  This can cause acid increases and death of fish.

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